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Overall this is a pretty eyescatching design if nothing else. I admit I don't quite know what the exact theme is, I mean it says celest...

by Eliyora

Okay I know this one is late and all but I enjoy this critiquing thing and figured I'd weigh in if you don't mind. I'm gonna be brutall...

by Eliyora

Hello, me again. In terms of design, this is certainly an improvement over the last one as far as balance is concerned. I can atleast b...

by Eliyora

Pretty good, but I'm not exactly seeing how this could be a Key or a blade to be honest. I know Keyblades are meant to look well a tad ...

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Overall this is a pretty eyescatching design if nothing else. I admit I don't quite know what the exact theme is, I mean it says celestial flow, but that could mean a lot of things and I'm not too sure.

Still I do like the crisscrossing colors on the blade itself which certainly gives it a decently unique appearance if nothing else.

I suppose if I had one critique, it would be more a nitpick, it's the number of holes in the blade itself. The five holes in the blade itself do sort of hurt it from a practical standpoint. Don't get me wrong, I know that seems a little silly to judge since obviously no one is gonna try and make this, before swinging it around on the battlefield, I get that.

Still though, the five large holes really hinder it as a weapon, since all someone would have to do is stab through one of them while the person using it swings it around and they'd pretty much be able to easily manipulate it, possibly even pull it out of the person's hands or make them fall flat on their face. Plus there's the risk the wield might accidently get it caught on something, but maybe I'm overthinking it.

Otherwise a pretty solid enough design. Kudos.
Okay I know this one is late and all but I enjoy this critiquing thing and figured I'd weigh in if you don't mind.

I'm gonna be brutally honest here, not a big fan of this particular key blade. I get it's probably meant more as a gag, since it's a plunger and all, but it's kind of on the basic side.

It's essentially just a plunger with a ring, key chain and a star attached to it. I mean, I'm guessing the plunger was probably the main requirement but you could have probably gone a little more creative with the design of the plunger.

Maybe make the shaft out of metal with some gems along it, with the tip being polished glass or porcelain or crystal, something to mix it up a bit. Least that way it offers something more unique in terms of appearance and visual flare is what I'm saying.

Then again if this is how the person who commissioned it intended for it to look I suppose that's okay, but if not, I'm just saying you should feel a little free to go a little crazy or give some more variety to it, atleast within reason.

I don't know, maybe I'm being too nitpicky here, and if so I apologize for that, just giving my thoughts.

Otherwise art is still solid enough, just the design itself is what bugs me.

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Hello, me again. In terms of design, this is certainly an improvement over the last one as far as balance is concerned.

I can atleast believe a person could swing this around as a sword if the need arose. Though with the key aspect, I feel like there should be another cut or whatever the technical term is, slightly smaller than the tip to help emphasis the key part.

Also maybe add another crystal or two in place of the holes, to give it a little more design flare, since it looks a little on the bland side as far as the blade part is concerned.

Don't have to get crazy mind you, just something to make it look a little cooler is all I'm saying.

Also kind of wondering about that one hole or gap near the tip, as to what exactly the purpose is. That seems like that could be more a hindrance than anything since it could easily get caught on someone's weapon if they aren't careful. I don't know just seems like a bit of an odd design choice.

Still the artwork is again solid enough, the handle is pretty nice, though the stars and moons seem a little odd since generally Keyblades go with a specific theme and this one I'm assuming is forest theme, so wouldn't a more grass and plant handle make sense?

Again it's your art and I'm not trying to be a nitpicky jerk or anything just saying.
Pretty good, but I'm not exactly seeing how this could be a Key or a blade to be honest. I know Keyblades are meant to look well a tad on the odd side, but they normally look like a key and this doesn't look like a key. A sword maybe, but that's a stretch too.

Also the swirl design kind of hinders it's ability as a blade as well, since with most of the blade curving out from the handle like that, essentially with the big swirl at the end seems like that would throw a person off balance if they tried to swing it.

The coloring and overall drawing of the blade is solid, it's the design that's a problem.

Again not trying to sound like a jerk or anything, just saying.
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djunk855 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2015
You were the guy who created Soren for Shinobi of the High Seas, right? I just wanted to say good work. I also want to say that whenever I picture Soren, I can't help but think of Ikkaku from Bleach. Was Soren inspired by him at all, at least in appearance (and maybe a bit of his personality)?
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nightmaremaster000 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2015
No actually got the inspiration from Pretal Ghoul from Black Cat.
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wolf1022 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2015
Thanks for watch!Nagisa Smiling Icon 
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Brother-Tico Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks for the +watch :)
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MALTIAN Featured By Owner May 6, 2015
Thanks for the favorite
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kevinjorg Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Happy bday dude   wish i had a pic done to commemorate 
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nightmaremaster000 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2015
Uh dude my Birthday was a while ago.
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Then Change it on your da ya hippie
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